Pairs of eyes - entirely closed;
Lone numb minds - entirely vacant;
They focused not at the failed attempt to speak.
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When conviction grew leaps and bounds;
When trust rose so by a fathom;
They focused not on the tossing butterflies.
As they tasted their first kiss,
As their fingers entwined subtly;
Into oblivion, slipped they – brazenly.
This post was written for Three Word Wednesday featured HERE.
Very nice work, I especially like the line, They focused not on the tossing butterflies. Well done!
ReplyDeleteThank you Nico! :)
ReplyDeleteA different perspective.. Liked it Kappu..Second para is my favorite :)
ReplyDeleteThanks so much for the comment and the visit Anand!!! :)
ReplyDeleteawesome!!!
ReplyDeleteNice one, Kappu. The poem was a true delight to the senses...!:)
ReplyDeleteI loved the first three lines.. we do fail to recognise the failed attempt to speak .. if only we are patient enough to coax the person to speak
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It is true. I agree with Bikram. Patience is key!
DeleteIndeed! Thanks for the comment meow!
DeleteThank you Muthiah.
ReplyDelete@Panchali di - thanks so much!!
@Bikram - am glad u liked it! Yea, and if we were patient enough.. if!! :D what a whole different story would turn out!
Sometimes I wonder if we truly see better with our eyes open.An open mind, now that is a different story... lovely poem
ReplyDeleteWow...such a beautiful explanation and imagery of first kiss. I feel like living those moments again :) Good one Kappu, truly loved this post. its quite sensual.
ReplyDeleteI really loved this... I never expected this ending.... This post brought out the romantic in me :)
ReplyDeleteGreat kappu.
ReplyDeleteThe emotions and feelings associated cannot be described in words. But you have aptly put it here. Indeed Bliss Oblivion :)
ReplyDeleteNice post with lovely message.Keep it up :-)
ReplyDeleteIs this a romantic poem? It's not exactly my favorite genre. But you do have a talent with weaving words.
ReplyDeleteDestination Infinity
Wow. Short yet so expressive. Nice work.
ReplyDelete@Reshma - yes, is the mind open is the larger questioN!
ReplyDelete@NU - Thank u girl! :)
@tan - humbled by your comment!!
Thank you lalithambal!
@Prasanna - Aww... :) Thanks for that sweet comment!!
Thanks Saibaba!
@Di - Thank you for that lovely compliment!!
Thanks Jay!
Awesomest......what magical poetry
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Beautiful, I loved the last para and the ending couldn't have been better. The word 'oblivion' is entwined so aptly here.
ReplyDelete@Ritesh, @Saru - thank you so much :)
ReplyDeleteFrom eyes to lips,,,lot said...nice
ReplyDeleteHey Kappu! Lovely poem!
ReplyDeleteP.S: I did stop by! :)