Sunday, September 2, 2012

Stranger in the Night

This post has been published by me as a part of the Blog-a-Ton 31; the thirty-first edition of the online marathon of Bloggers; where we decide and we write. To be part of the next edition, visit and start following Blog-a-Ton. The theme for the month is 'Strangers in the Night'

“Akka, but he is a stranger!!!!”, Vinisha squealed to her sister.

“He is not a stranger Vinisha, he is your 'Husband', for heavens sake”, her sister grunted softly and rolled her eyes.

“Still...”, she continued.

Akka stopped braiding Vinishas hair, and with a wry smile teased her, “At least you wont be Strangers in the Night” and laughed softly. 

Vinisha kept mum. She could not see the humor in her sisters cynicism.  Arrgh.

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She entered the room - eyes down, nervously looking at her feet; suddenly noticing the red on her nails and the maroon-vines the mehendi made on her feet. 

He looked at her, silently drinking in her beauty - her red Tussar draped along those slender hips, her long hair adorned with flowers; her khol rimmed eyes which showed hesitation and excitement all at once; and that beautiful mark of Sindhoor on her forehead that spoke of chastity and commitment at lengths. He sighed softly.

She looked like an apsara, was she Ramba or Oorvasi perhaps?



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One morning, Vinisha retrospected the truth in her sisters 'joke' - 

He was not a Stranger. 

They were one. 

He was her all.

She smiled lightly; enthralled at everything; her future included. . . 

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61 comments:

  1. ..and the lived happily ever after!!
    All the best for BAT!

    ❤Not Just My Allegories❤

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  2. short simple and sweet story dear!!
    all the best!!!
    :)

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  3. the story is centered around first night theme ? Very nice take on the subject, loved the pic...

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  4. Ahaaaaaaaa beautiful kappu :D you are to be innnnnnnnnnn :D next edition :D

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  5. Simple yet very meaningful penning. Really liked the concept plotted. Supe.

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  6. Short, but dripping with detail! I really liked the detailing! All the best!

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  7. an every brides story :) loved it thoroughly

    all the best for BAT :)

    if you have time do visit
    Strangers in the night

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  8. Fantastic Kappu!! You seem to have a deep perception of human mind and it's working....loved this! All the best. xoxo

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  9. hmmm!! you left out all the interesting parts in the story....please mail me the first (uncensored) draft?

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  10. Anisha - haha, yea! sorts of *winks*

    Thank you Nivedita

    Thank you ashzzes, coming up to your blog now!

    @astro - yes, it is :) Thanks a lot for your lovely comment!

    @Ramya - Thank youuuuuu pretty!

    @Sandy - glad you liked the detailing!

    @Panchali - THANKKKK you! Adore your comments ji :)

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  11. Nice narration and liked the way you concluded. People these days rile so much against arranged marriage. But all said and done it works in many cases.

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  12. @ganesh - hehehe... well well well, typically doctorish! :D

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  13. @TF - thanks for your lovely presence first of all :) and am glad that you liked the narration! wrt marriages, nothing is a safe bet :) But to think of how the yesteryear "adjusted" and kept the relationships going - HATS oFF!

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  14. Brevity is the soul of wit!!!

    You ended it perfectly. I loved the way you wrote the last line...

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  15. 'ŕ®®ிக அழகாக பதிப்பு!' I loved it to the core.. The way, 'Still' changed to 'He was her all!' Wow.. Beauty!

    Someone is Special

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  16. Echoing Ganesh's comment. The story was abrupt and there were many details which were missed.

    Joy always,
    Susan

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  17. @Saru Singal - Thanks! Glad you liked! :)

    @Saravanan - thanksssir!! ;) miga azhagaana??? :) well, tanks a TON!!

    @susan - it wasnt more of a story yeah :)

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    1. Yes... miga azhagaana pathipu... ennudaiya peyar Saravana Kumar Murugan.. Hmm in office, cannot type in Tamil!

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    2. haha :) thanks for the second visit! appreciate it :)

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    3. Hmm this is my third visit.. Okay, do update the BLOGGER NAME and XX in the end code..

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  18. Reminded me a little of MounaRagam movie the first few lines... :D Very nice write up Kappu...Interesting :)

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  19. Very different take on the phrase! Short and sweet narration! :) Brings to mind the sisters from the recent Dairy Milk ad :) Best wishes for BAT!

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  20. Fluidly written sweet tale.

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  21. Its such a big truth of many people where you surrender in front of a stranger and the next moments you realise that you always knew him/her ... nicely written

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  22. @deepa, jayashree - thank you, I love them both! The movie and the ad! :)

    Thanks Suresh!

    @Amit - yes and quite surprising though the fact is!

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  23. nicely painted :)
    ATB for BAT :)
    i could not participate...but u can see my post here
    Karan - Strangers in the Night

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  25. Nicely narrated. The descriptions were nice. An arrange marriage has it's own charm, which only two strangers can enjoy.

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  26. @richa, manu - sorry, somehow your comments went to the spam list :( thanks for stopping by appreciate it!

    @Karan - thanks and am coming there now!!

    Kshitij - Thanks for coming by my blog and that thoughtful criticism!

    @DA^ thank u!

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  27. a story that most of us can relate...straight to the point!
    superbly narrated!

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  28. nicely written... crisp, yet rich.

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  29. Thanks Dishit/Nefertit :)

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  30. Thanks Kappu for visiting my blog and appreciating it. Do follow my blog by clicking the link "Join this site" ... You have added me in Networked blogs ... I will removing the NetworkedBlogs link soon... Thanks a lot...

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  31. I see this story as an answer to another story written for BAT, where marriage proved to be a bane for the couple. I don't remember the name though.

    anyway, loved the way you captured the truth realization part.

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  32. @Amit - sure, you have it there! :)

    @Diwakar - Thanks, am glad that you liked it. I wish I can read that story, post the link if you remember it! THANKS

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  33. Good one... enjoyed reading your blog post... keep them coming

    http://vj-ontherun.blogspot.in/

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  34. Short and sweet :) Superb post!

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  35. Thanks Vijay :)

    Thanks Rajkiran!!

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  36. Wonderfully penned..short and sweet..

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  37. Nice narrative. However, I simply can't accept that two people can become one in just one night.

    ATB for BAT 31

    Cheers
    CRD

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  38. Thank you Odyzz, Amit ji :)

    @CRD - haha! yea :)

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  39. Wow! Nice to read it!
    I too agree with CRD! Actually sounds scary!!!
    Thanks for dropping by my blog Kappu.
    Do drop by often. I'd love your visits & comments.
    And do share a pic of your wedding footwear... :)
    Fashion Panache - Bridal Mantra 2012

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  40. enjoyed reading it....:)

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  41. @bushavalli - thanks, yes and I will stop by more often! ;)

    @Aarti - yay! sweetie! Thanks for the visit and the comment :)

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  42. That is such a cute and realistic take! Damn sweet post :)

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  43. Brings a smile on the readers face ! Nice one Kappu :)

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  44. @richi - thanks sweets, not a better writer than you :)

    @Preetty ;) thanks girl!

    @Manasa - thanks and hey I love your blogs name :)

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  45. hey a beautiful read kappu loved the plot -and i even loved to see my name :D :D actually its very rare to find some one named vinisha not even a fictional character :D :P
    P.s - I am following your blog - do drop at my blog too :) :)

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  46. Thanks Vinisha :) You have a very cute blog!! as bubbly as your age!

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  47. I loved the way you have described the "state of mind" of a bride. Artistically detailing the beauty of an Indian Bride. :)

    Glad to be here..Keep the good work pouring..

    Regards,
    Megha :)

    P.S. This take on the topic was very interesting and I could relate with it.. :)

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  48. Hi,


    My first time in your space and definitely not the last. Loved the womanly touch in your writing and so very romantic too :D

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  49. @megha - thank u! am glad u liked it! thanks for the maiden visit and do stop by more often!

    @Ghazala - Thanks heapsssss! :)

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